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The lecturer claims that thenew policy, which allows people to work four days a week instead offive, will have negative effects for companies as well as society.This claim is not in agreement with that of the reading passage,which suggests that such a policy will bebeneficial.

According to the lecture, acompany that allows employees to have fewer working hours is likelyto hire more people to ensure that it meets normal levels ofproductivity. If this occurs, expenses for training and medicalinsurance will inevitably rise. The reading passage, by contrast,suggests that employees who enjoy more leisure time make fewermistakes and work more efficiently, leading to increased profitsfor the enterprise.

The second point of differencebetween the lecture and the reading passage concerns the impact ofthe policy on the unemployment rate. The lecturer asserts that forthe sake of saving money, employers might raise their expectationsof 4-day employees rather than recruit more people. Conse,employees who work 4 days will be forced to finish what they did in5 days previously, and no additional jobs will becreated.

Finally, the lecturer arguesthat under the new policy, employees will experience notonly decreased of life (as shorterworking hours will translate into less pay), but also fewer chancesto be promoted to supervisory positions. However, the readingpassage contends that more leisure hours can create opportunitiesto strengthen family ties and allow employees to develop privateinterests, making them feel more satisfied with theirlives.

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The lecturer claims that thenew policy, which allows people to work four days a week instead offive, will have negative effects on companies as wellas society. This claim is not in agreement with that of the readingpassage, which suggests that such a policy will bebeneficial.

According to the lecture, acompany with fewer workinghours is likely to hire more people to keep normalproductivity. As a result,expenses for training and medical insurance will inevitably rise.The reading passage, by contrast, suggests that employeeswithmore leisurewill work more efficiently by making fewermistakes, whichleads to increased profits for theenterprise.

The second difference betweenthe lecture and the reading passage concerns the impact of thepolicy on unemployment. Thelecturer asserts that to save money,employers wouldrather raise their expectation of 4-dayemployees than recruit more people. The 4-day workers,therefore, will be forced to finish what they would complete in 5days, and no additional jobs will be created forsociety. 

Finally, the lecturerwarnsthat under the new policy, employees will suffer notonly a worse life (as shorter working hours willtranslate into less pay), but also fewer chances to be promoted tosupervisory positions. However, the reading passage contends thatmore leisure hours open the door tostrengthening family ties and developing personal interests,which means asatisfying life.

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